December 7, 2008
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DAM(N)
#45 – DAM(N)
let her love nourish you as it cascades down your chin
the trembling is the beginning of the breaking dam within
you squeeze her thighs tighter, for a better grip of her passion
you hungrily lap at her as if her nutrients were a tiny ration
let her nourish you completely, tickle her with the tip of your tongue
let her become your ecstasy and see how quickly the dam becomes undone
her love ravages your face and every drop you quickly taste
savor the flavor of her favor… than become anxious to replace
the last taste with another, knowing each one is sweeter than the one before
alternate your pace, see how much she can take, then slowly open the door
feel the warmth as your knight enters the secret chambers of her palace
let it engulf you as you slide into the curve of her sacred chalice
find heaven in her palace, let her jewels of passion adorn your skin
as you enter deeper in, you become the yang and she remains your yin
your knight conquers her fully, engrave your name across her wall
feel the sting of her lashes across your back as she gently claws
pulses resonate from her core outward, the trembling becomes earthquakes
your knight fulfills his conquest, he nods to her as the dam breaks.
Comments (9)
NOW THAT!!!!! THAT’S HOW YOU WRITE DAMMIT. THAT’S HOW YOU WRITE FROM NOW ON. this is crafty and well paced. damn damn damn (florida evans voice). lmao. keep it ‘write’ homie. you’re on your way to becoming that writer you talk to me about. keep striving
@Arrive__Arcane - guess where it came from??? THAT DAMN POSTER!!!! It’s my phone’s wallpaper now. and a convo i had earlier with someone too. it all added to the piece. thanks yo, i dunno who this writer is i talk to you about… but i already call myself a writer sir!!! (is that conceit?)
Vivid imagery. Just call me Woodrow for about 5 seconds,…….ok, it’s gone now
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First off, I like the rhyme scheme. I love how you alternate from non-rhyming to rhyme. I had a hard time doing this, because when I first began to write, I did it in all rhyme. I actually had to “learn” how to write pieces that did NOT rhyme,…go figure.
It also seemed that the more I write like what you just wrote, it was at the times when I was NOT “getting any”. But THEN on the other hand, some muse comes along and then I’m writing about 5 pieces about them.
,…go figure,…
well done girl..well done…
i was going to say something else, but i decided against it….hahaha
@Applejacque - as long as the images were clear to you, i’m glad!!! you can take what you want from it all… it’s for that to happen. hope you enjoyed what you saw. thanks for coming thru. and i prefer to rhyme actually. i truly love the rhyming scheme of words. did you conquer the rhyming lessons? lol. i hope so. i dont see how anyone can not “GET ANY”… lol… its always available somewhere, imo. but… i dont have to get any to write about it, i dont have to be ‘not getting any’ to write about it either. whatever topic comes from this mind of mine… just cums! lol.
@miss_thiq - uhm… now i wanna know what you were gonna say… you know that right? hit the inbox!!! lol.
Great, now I’m horny.
Haha, kidding…or am I?
I have been reading, but to comment “well done” on every poem is…well, that’ll get old.
Anyway, well done. You have talent. You should be published.
dezam u bringing it
I love the first line….i love how you use the body images lol I know I’ve been MIA ….i blame finals lol.
~Angel~
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