November 15, 2008
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Damaged
I wrote it tonight… there’s been a tangent of “damaged” posts lately… so I figured I would post it. I dunno. It may not be understood, it might be all too well understood. Who knows. Here goes.
DAMAGED
How you received me
Was deceiving
And I’m still needing
Completing
So complete me
COMPLETELY
Before it’s too late
And I can’t be saved
Weighed down from all the baggage
I’ve been damaged
I’ve been bandaged
And I’ve been packaged
Soon I can’t be salvaged
Comments (17)
wow….I love it!!! its really clear…
@godsreflection - i didn’t think anyone would really like it for some reason….
@ISLYMORE - yeah, I’m the same way. And the ones I think people should like the most, they dont! weird huh…
Beautifully stated. Wish I could express myself as you do….awesomeness
if it’s a poem, it’s a class, and it’s official… haha
D
@dadj_21 - i think i missed your actual response… but ill take it.
Swagger Jacker.. Just kidding. I love it. Wheres my byline
@R_Pieces - look missee… i said there’s been a tangent of “damaged” posts lately. so i did my own. i’m jackin i guess. i’m jackin… lol… altho, your’s was just a ramble, mine is a simple poem.
Haha. I laugh because this would be a poem or just words to say to the NEXT joker that decides to ‘mess’ with me; damaged goods.
Beautiful as always. Love it.
M
Im a sucker for anything heartfelt and raw with emotion :) love it
And I can’t be saved
Weighed down from all the baggage
I’ve been damaged
I’ve been bandaged
And I’ve been packaged
Soon I can’t be salvaged
this one right here i am totally feeling this flow right here was so smooth i thought i was gonna fall like ice and that’s word.
@ISLYMORE - I can come, drop eProps and not leave anything next time
but for my 2nd “actual” response….
very well put… it seems like you straight freestyled w/ it… being and avid freestyle writer myself, I loved it… good improvisation…
D
@imagoodegg31 - welcome! so glad you stopped by. i appreciate the response,. so nice of you to come by. thanks so much reallly.
@lastingoptions - and i knew… you would have something to say girl! i wondered if you would be the first to respond, but you weren’t online. i always know when you will relate for some reason. i think you try to be in my mind sometimes.
Let’s just call you “The Truth”…lol…That was great, loved it…
And I’m still needing
Completing
So complete me
COMPLETELY
^——I can dig it….=]
@ISLYMORE - shoooot, I think YOU try to be in MY mind…haha.
very very good. i love the pace and the alliteration. nice, nice, nice.
R. Cane