Taking a stab at haikus…. Let me know if I’m doing this right.
1. Haiku # 1
angels guide us here
passion swelling our bodies
heaven is our bed
2. Haiku # 2
got there together
finally getting to see
HE makes me believe
Nice, haikus are hard that dam 17 syllables LOL Ilike the first one, Maybe if clouds replaced heavens.
Love the second its was YAY!!
first one had six syllables on the first line… the second one was better though… snaps again…
D
@dadj_21 - sorry. it was an accident sir. it’s ‘guide’ not ‘guided’
@Stillpoetic - yeah… cloud could work two. i posted them both, although i only wanted to post the second. i think i did okay for a first timer.
@ISLYMORE - yeah I think so also, second one was
@Stillpoetic - second one was…?
@ISLYMORE - okay… i mean for the first time… it was good…
@ISLYMORE - a heater
@dadj_21 - you still got more to read… so go back in time… i think you are working from the end back… so let’s get to it!
@ISLYMORE - I’m actually caught up… so HA!
@dadj_21 - Then maybe my bad?
@ISLYMORE - yeah… just a lil bit… lol but i forgive ya though…
@dadj_21 - ahhh, haaaa!!! i think you missed one. i see nothing for you for class 1,2, and 3!! i’ll be nice. i’ll post the link. http://weblog.xanga.com/ISLYMORE/681143652/poetry-class-1-2-and-3.html
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Nice, haikus are hard that dam 17 syllables LOL Ilike the first one, Maybe if clouds replaced heavens.
Love the second its was YAY!!
first one had six syllables on the first line… the second one was better though… snaps again…
D
@dadj_21 - sorry. it was an accident sir. it’s ‘guide’ not ‘guided’
@Stillpoetic - yeah… cloud could work two. i posted them both, although i only wanted to post the second. i think i did okay for a first timer.
@ISLYMORE - yeah I think so also, second one was
@Stillpoetic - second one was…?
@ISLYMORE - okay… i mean for the first time… it was good…
D
@ISLYMORE - a heater
@dadj_21 - you still got more to read… so go back in time… i think you are working from the end back… so let’s get to it!
@ISLYMORE - I’m actually caught up… so HA!
D
@dadj_21 - Then maybe my bad?
@ISLYMORE - yeah… just a lil bit… lol but i forgive ya though…
D
@dadj_21 - ahhh, haaaa!!! i think you missed one. i see nothing for you for class 1,2, and 3!! i’ll be nice. i’ll post the link. http://weblog.xanga.com/ISLYMORE/681143652/poetry-class-1-2-and-3.html